I would like to write about my friend Suaidah who has a good personality. The first time I met her, I thought that she was a hot - tempered girl. When I am getting closer with her, I realize that she isn't like what I've thought before. I've learned that she is a very nice person, but she is a little bit moody. Besides, she is a good listener too. She always listens to her friends and gives them some advice. When she is listening to her friends, she is looked more mature than her age even though she is one year younger than me. It is all about her personality which it makes me amazed her. I hope this friendship will be getting closer and closer.
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Nice writing, Muti! U give clear description on a friend u a describing. Why don't u display her pict too. Er, u still have to be aware of the grammar, the rule of complex sentence, and a bit preposition. All in all, it's already good:-)
BalasHapusthanks for your comment Ms.
BalasHapusI'll improve on the next posting
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